https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LoK_z220nJM
The feedback I received last time was to be more dynmaic so I shot the video outside and tried to be use more emphasizes on words. By this time I feel like I have gotten a lot more comfortable in front of the camera so I think this project really made me go outside my comfort zone.
Hello Carly! While the content of your elevator pitch is informative, there are some things you could do to make it more impactful. I suggest turning your phone long-ways, as to record in landscape, rather than portrait. Memorizing your pitch also makes for a more powerful pitch, as it makes it appear as though you thoroughly know the business concept you are proposing. Hope this helps!
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ReplyDeleteYou have definitely made improvements to your elevator pitch, and you seem much more confident. I think you did a good job seeming passionate about your topic and think that you did well in hitting all your points in a concise form. This project also made me go out of my comfort zone, but it was worth it to feel the end results. Good job!
Hey Carly,
ReplyDeleteYour pitch has drastically improved since the first one. You seem more comfortable in front of the camera and you are more knowledgable about the topic in general. I like how specific you have gotten about what you want to do to reduce vaping. I still think your pitch could benefit by talking about how you plan on getting states to change the minimum age to buy nicotine products to 21.
Hey Carly! I believe that you having shot the video outside is a great tactic in getting in your comfort zone to better get your point across for your pitch. The video was overall fantastic and I believe you definitely improved from your last few videos. The only thing I can say is that you should try to keep your arms from moving so much because it gives of the impression that you are a little nervous.
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